Story: The Competitive Angler
The Weekend had finally come for the biggest fishing derby
of the year. Jack a small-town boy in east Texas was completely prepared for
this event and had been practicing on this lake for the past month. He knew exactly
what the fish were doing and knew exactly what his plan would be during the
tournament. Jack had been competitive bass fishing for seventy five percent of
his life now and knew nothing other than it. He had won many tournaments but never one of
this caliber, so he knew this was his time to shine. Jack was only scared of
one thing, the stick of east Texas. This man went by the name of Tom Smith, he
had won this particular tournament the past 7 of the 10 times he had fished it.
Jack believed there was no way he could beat Tom with out a little advantage.
Two days before the tournament was supposed to start Jack
was contemplating methods, he could use to beat Tom, and some of them were
unsportsmanlike and did not represent Jacks character of being a hard worker
and rule follower. The idea that Jack had come up with was that he would unplug
Toms boat the night before the tournament not allowing it to fully charge to be
able fish the entire day the next day. Jack
felt awful about this but did this in the hopes of beating Tom the next day.
The day of the tournament rolls around and Tom notices his
trolling motor is super low, and just assumed he forgot to plug it in the night
before. This would not allow him to fish the fish he found in practice on the
main lake. So on the spot Tom picked a cove near the launch that was very calm
and protected and fished a long secondary point just inside. To Tom’s amazement
he had that day everyone dreams about where he cracked 34 pounds far surpassing
the second-place finisher with 21 pounds. Jack was dumbfounded witnessing what
happened on the water that day. After takeoff Jack ran to his first spot where he
caught a small limit and then ran out of gas because he forgot to fill up the
night before because he was too focused on Tom’s boat.
Jack congratulated Tom and left the tournament with nothing
to say. Jack was amazed with What tom made of that day. And that day Jack told
himself he would never try to take the easy way out of something. As well he
would never do a quick fix because it is bound to backfire and hurt himself in
the end.
(Picture is of a Competitive Fishing Boat, Source: Personal Picture)
Authors Notes:
The story above was inspired from the story of TheMonkey
and the Girl. This story came from the Santal Folklore section. In The
Monkey and The Girl, there was a girl that fell for a monkey. But the girls
parents did not approve of this so they killed the monkey. The dad decided to
burn the monkey like the corpse of a man. The girl was watching and distracted
everyone standing around and then blinded them with sand. When they were
clearing their eyes the girl jumped in the fire and burned with the monkey. So
the plot I took away with this story was that doing a quick fix to a problem
will backfire in the end. And this plot if from the perspective of the dad
losing the daughter in the end.
So in my story Jack was the one that tried to fix the problem of Tom always winning
and then it backfired on him because tom won because he went two a brand new
cove he had never fished before.
Hey Drew,
ReplyDeleteMan, this was such a great story. Based on your intro post, I feel like this story is very meaningful to you and your interests. That makes it all the more fun for your readers when they see your passion and interests coming out. You did a great job in engaging your audience. I look forward to seeing this story evolve with your future edits.
-Andy
Hi Drew,
ReplyDeleteThis was a nice way to rewrite this story in a way that was more relatable than the original tale. A competition that is won by means of cheating is only a poor solution to trying to get your way. It does seem that Jack learned his lesson and will not be trying to sabotage people in the near future.
Hey, Drew!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you took an existing story and gave it a re-skin that made it more applicable to something that you're passionate about. Readers love to read about what writers care about -- it shows if you're only lukewarm on a project. I'm glad Jack learned his lesson; regardless of what you're doing, it doesn't pay to cheat!
Hey Drew!
ReplyDeleteI like how you changed the story to get the lesson across! I actually have zero interest in fishing, but you did a really good job of keeping the story interested and the reader going. As the reader, I had no trouble getting the message of cheating across and feeling like the character learned his lesson.